Welcome to My Monday Minis.
This is where I review short stories and flash fiction.
For today I’ll be telling you about Stickman
by Dennis E. Yates
My Review
Put yourself in Doug’s shoes.
He’s waiting in the car outside the store for his girlfriend, Jane, to return with a bag of ice. What was taking her so long?
Do you ever notice how long a few minutes, or even one minute, are when you’re the one waiting.
He happens to notice someone lurking around the parking lot, scoping out the vehicles. Doug figures the guy is looking for something to steal. He wonders if he should call the police, but decides to wait and see what the guy does.
He can’t believe it when the guy breaks into the back of a van parked right in front of his car. Now, Doug knows he has to do something. Unfortunately, after taking pictures with his cell phone all day, the battery is all but dead. He manages to take some pictures of the license plate and the bumper sticker, and actually gets the guys face peering out the back window.
You know those stickers people put on the back of their vehicles? The ones depicting the father, mother, boys, and girls, plus pets as stick figures? This van has one and it pings Doug’s radar. He’s read about the serial killer dubbed The Stickman. Could this guy be him?
Now Doug has to act. But what should he do. His cell phones dead and there’s no security guys to be found. Once the family gets in the van, he’s forced to do something. Anything.
This story reminded me of a movie, Amber Alert. Three friends observe a young girl in a car and it looks like she’s in trouble. They recognize her face from an Amber Alert, so they follow the car.
I wonder what I’d do in this situation. It’s such a surreal moment. The decisions you make aren’t easy. Your thinking on the fly. Unless you are trained to react, it’s not something that comes naturally.
Stickman made me pause and wonder. I shared Doug’s indecision about what to do. As events whirled faster and faster, my feelings turned to trepidation. I felt like I was with Doug and my anxiety hit overdrive.
All the way until right at the end I was deeply engaged in this story. The words flowed smoothly and characters and events felt genuine.
I would have given this more stars, but somewhere near the end, I felt some confusion. Like I’d missed something. I reread the end and again I felt something had been left out. Maybe it was just me. I still liked this one and will be reading more from Dennis.
3 Stars
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About Dennis Yates
Dennis Yates (born 1963) is an American writer of novels and short stories. He is a native of Portland Oregon, and a fan of long road trips, animals, engaging literature and independent films. He often dreams of escaping the Oregon rain clouds to the scorching sun and red canyons of the American Southwest.
Dennis enjoys writing psychological thrillers and dark comedy. On the lighter side, his quintessential, quirky road-trip novel The Teriyaki Samurai was a quarter-finalist in the 2013 Amazon Breakout Novel Award contest. Dennis draws deeply from his love of nature and the American landscape, which he firmly believes must play an important character in all of his writing.
He is a huge fan of such authors as Daniel Woodrell, Cormac McCarthy, Annie Proulx, William Gay, Frank Bill, John Rector, Blake Crouch and many others.
Dennis can be reached at yates.author@gmail.com and on Twitter at @YatesScribe.
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